Monday, May 23, 2011

Monday Poetry Jam - Fatherhood or honkey tonk

An interesting combination of themes, and, of course, I immediately felt I had to try and do both together.   Fathers are just such good subject matter for honkey tonk blues -- "A Boy Named Sue," etc.   It's been a busy week so my offering is pretty much thrown together from notes on scraps of paper.   And unfortunately there is no music to go with it.   I think the first part has the feel of sad honkey tonk but the last part is more like: "For he's a jolly good fellow which nobody can deny..."   

Also, I need to make a disclaimer.  This is not about my own Dad. 

 My Dad, the Hermit of Dismal Key

Well, sort of not.  Just like it is not about me...sort of not.  Both my Dad and myself were indeed raging alcoholics.  We were both assholes when we were drinking.  And we both eventually went to A.A.   He died sober several years ago and I hope to follow that example -- although preferably not in the too near future.

So the theme of the poem is accurate for both of us.  But to the best of my knowledge nobody named anything after either of us, neither of us had a truck, and we never knew anyone named Big Jim McGrew.  On the other hand,  I did keep a pail by my bed so some of the details fit.  It's all poetic license anyhow.   So, after way too much babble, here is the poem:

Lucky's

(Chorus)
At the back end of town new the old train tracks
there's a place they call Lucky's where nobody looks back.
It was named for my father who went there every day,
in search of some kind of salvation, they say.

Whenever they called that he'd run out of luck,
I'd go bring him home in the back of my truck,
and roll him on the cot with a pail by his head
and spit when he moaned that he wished he was dead.

Now Big Jim McGraw would have granted that wish
'cause Dad dipped his spoon in that married man's dish
just one time too often.  So I knew Dad was dead
when Jim came to the door with a bruiser named Fred.

(Chorus)
At the back end of town new the old train tracks
there's a place they call Lucky's where nobody looks back.
It was named for my father who went there every day,
in search of some kind of salvation, they say.


But instead they announced that they'd given up booze
and they wanted to share with my Dad the good news,
that a day at a time, his life could be freed
and, amazing to all, my old man agreed.

They lived the 12 Steps and then other's came too
and the town came to know then as men who were true.
Then they bought the old bar whose business was fleeting
and turned it into a clubhouse for meetings

Now twenty years later the old man passed away
and the whole town showed up with respects to pay
and every night down by the old railroad line
the A.A. is great and the coffee is fine.

(Chorus)
At the back end of town new the old train tracks
there's a place they call Lucky's where nobody looks back.
It was named for my father who went there every day,
to share his salvation with others, they say.


















80 comments:

  1. Standing up now, applauding! I DEFINITELY can hear the music!

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  3. As I read your honky tonk poem ... I could hear Johnny Cash or Waylon Jennings on stage singing it. Seemed to fit.

    I dare say ... You rock!

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  4. The poem/song is such fun, I can't believe you cobbled it together on scraps of paper. Well, maybe the different verses came piecemeal that way ... I can visual more verses, turning the song into an epic...
    You might submit this to the AA Grapevine...

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  5. smiles, you spun a great song out of this and i am glad he found freedom instead of the pain...fabulous storytelling...

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  6. Wow! I had been thinking of having a go at this - though I'll be struggling to fit it in this week. Don't fancy trying to follow this, though! It's brilliant. Congrats galore.

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  7. Very neat the way the thing that died was the alcoholism . . .

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  8. Quite inspirational Mark. So many families caught up in this. Kudos to you for the poem and your sobriety.
    QMM

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  9. Interesting, since I also wrote about my alcoholic father and his akin to Chet Baker around the same time to a site, which you might like vox poetica in which they have contributor series, and one called 'He Had Ears'...so I wrote a jazz song...

    Nice that I get to read some of your work!

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